Tuesday, May 6, 2014

Narrative

Narrative from Jaquese Derrickson on Vimeo.

11 comments:

  1. Good story and use of continuity editing.

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  2. I liked your different use of angles. I wish the last shot of the door was in focus. Good story though

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  3. I like the jump cut you included at the end including the police a second time. I was missing the clip of the second boy peering in the window though; I think it added to the story.

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  4. Great continuity and acting. I especially liked your cuts on the stairs and when he looked out the window. The only bad shot was the door at the end in my opinion.

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  5. I liked the variety of camera angles in this cut. It really added to the story that you showed him breaking in and the way you introduced the neighbor. Still, some of the shots were too dark with heads cut off.

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  6. Nice video, in a few shots some heads were chopped off for a little bit, but good work overall.

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  7. Looks much more cleaned up than the original. The audio is improved along with the video itself. I'm still not really grasping on where the two characters stand though. I know that the second person that comes in has some sort of relation to the person that the first character was robbing the house from.

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  8. Really liked the aspect of how they almost became buddies in the end. The cuts were nice and smooth and really helped progress the storyline.

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  9. I like the use of the cuts as the police knock on the door. I also liked the way you could see the neighbor out the window before he actually got to the door.

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  10. The editing had some transitions I felt weren't quite as smooth as the original but a number of scenes felt stronger. In particular the ending where you used choppy zoom technique on the door was a lot stronger in giving a more ominous feeling. It leaves you wanting more but I feel this way the ending feels more complete.

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  11. Pretty good use of different camera angles - though the scene by the stairs didn't quite work for me with the heads cut off. The jump shots worked well as well though though I think some other transitions would have worked well too. I really liked the storyline.

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